Unsupported Conclusion

You’d be surprised how many times I read a paper that provides a bunch of evidence saying one thing and then thean says but I don’t think we should follow any of that well the problem with this conclusion isn’t necessarily that the the point that it makes the problem with the conclusion is that it’s unsupported if you want to come up with this conclusion then you need to write a paper that provides evidence that there’s no way to actually attract hummingbirds to our backyards I didn’t provide that evidence therefore I I really can’t come to this conclusion so you know in juvenile justice courses I find this a lot a lot it’s it’s really prevalent and you know justice courses we have some very big time opinions about things that may not be true particularly when we talk about that that we you know the later on.

And the course assignment about the you know three three or four different programs you know here pick one of these programs research it come back and tell me whether or not it works why it doesn’t work whether there’s any evidence you know you need to provide evidence to support all of that and then your conclusion needs to support that evidence and you’d be having it you’d be surprised how many people write a paper on dare or scared-straight or boot camp and they show all this well you know according to the research people that go to scared-straight are more likely to commit crimes than people that don’t go to scared-straight or according to the research there has no additional impact over not doing anything at all and then in their conclusion they say but we should keep there or we should keep scared-straight even though people are more likely to to commit crime after they go through these programs we should keep them anyway .

Because if it helps one person it was worth it well that’s a very very dangerous mentality to take how many people do we heard in the in the process of print help just one so this is kind of an example of how you need to support your conclusions and then I I wrote the conclusion down here a little bit better this would be a more appropriate conclusion for the paper hummingbirds are an excellent addition to your backyard birding experience not only do they add beautiful and unique birds to your backyard but the plants used to attract them can provide natural beauty to your backyard as well attracting these birds can be done easily by adding appropriate plant life to your backyard or adding attractive artificial feeders to your backyard area this provides methods of attracting these birds for all skill levels and even those who do not necessarily have a green thumb that’s a great conclusion I never said I never said we I never said I think I’m it is understood this is my opinion.

Writing In First Person

You’d be surprised some people if they don’t know which way to do it do it both ways APA has guidelines for how to write numbers if the number is less than 10 you write the number out okay unless and there are some key this is why getting the APA manual is kind of important there are some key differentiations as to when we don’t write the number out if it’s just one cup one page six pages something like that we’re always gonna write the number out so you probably see me marking here oh and E because we should have written that out we’re going to APA once again this is why getting the APA manual kind of important.

Because you you really need to know when those variations occur and the only way to do that is to get the APA manual or look it up there are some sites you can look it up on but anyway nectar to fill these feeders gonna be created by simply adding one cup of sugar – 1 cup of water and a pot on your stove and slowly bringing to a boil citation good once it has cooled it can be added to the feeder and all that is left is to wait for your hummingbirds to begin coming to your feeder no citation no citation needed it’s my information it’s the writers information I’m interpreting so now we get into the conclusion now this conclusion is broken off in pages so we’re going to do the best we can here but the first thing I look at and I would have caught this in my initial skim through so once again we have that big indent so you’d see 0.5 inches there in conclusion I just want to say that it is impossible for you to attract hummingbirds to your backyard no first person that’s the note you would see no first person.

Don’t write in first person do you not use I do not use we it’s unnecessary you don’t need to do it and you’ll see I’ll provide you a good example I’ve written this conclusion one specific way I’ve actually written another can that’ll give you good example of how to write a conclusion it is assumed that what you write in your paper is your opinion so you don’t need to say I or we or anything like that so in conclusion I just want to say that it’s impossible for you to attract hummingbirds to your backyard not only are there not any feeders available to attract them with artificial food but the plants that attract them are not easy to plant and will only grow in nature preserves not your backyard we are wasting our time trying to attract hummingbirds to our backyards you should just go to your local Nature Preserve or watch videos about them ok let’s talk about this conclusion a little bit what’s wrong with it think about it for a second looks thing about what is wrong with this confusion.

The Classification Problem

Describing insufficient data especially at the important point which are non-standard how you solve that problem which may be non-trivial so that others can actually replicate your result results ok we can kind of go through that or skip that a little bit and one thing which I said before which I wanted to mention is especially if you are kind of new to scientific writing start with this top-down approach give a global picture of what you want to communicate and once the global picture is given you can go deep in the individual for the individual components or aspects of your problem because you don’t do that if you start providing all the details from the beginning on the readers very very quickly lost and you may start with for example top level first explaining what the individual tasks are that you separate into component that you now have. Get to know more on classification onĀ Edusson.

Let’s say three components that you want to solve for example if you’re in the classification problem you have three problems the first problem is how to get your training data the second one may be how to get good features and the third one is how to realize a good classification system from technical perspective so you broke that down to three components and then you can describe the components with more details so explain the concept for let’s say the individual components like the classification system what is the underlying math behind that and then in the end at the lowest bottom provide the technical details it allows others to replicate your results okay experimental section again you want to describe what experiments have you conducted why the experiments have been conducted so the perfect case every block starts a sentence the first experiment is designed to show that the second experiment is designed to show that whatever this new sensor is 10 to 100 times more accurate than existing technology at the same time it is easier to use an existing technology then it means you would have to probe if you make these claims you will have to provide two experiments or at least to one showing the accuracy and the other one showing the ease of use.

If you don’t do that people will complain that you make claims that you which are not backed up by your experimental evaluation and that’s hard to argue against that so something which can actually kill a good technical paper if the claims that it makes are not supported by the experiments it always helps to compare your approach to other techniques so if you have a baseline technique and your new great method compared to what’s out there like in the report compare the nearest neighbor approach to the decision tree for example so make a comparison say which one is better what are the advantages of the individual messes yeah there again some example from the paper was indicating the divisional aspects what has been done and then we can have the conclusion is again a shorter part of the text.

Facts in Essay

You need a good strong thesis statement that presents your opinion at the end of your introductory paragraph and speaking of that the thesis statement is always always always always the final sentence of your introductory paragraph the thesis statement is really easy to find it’s always the last sentence of your introductory paragraph okay so this is the basic formula the basic pattern for a good intro paragraph now you’re saying it should be short because the main body the main idea is in the body well almost the main idea technically is in the introduction and the thesis but the main argument all the reasons and the details good really are in the are in the body so again you don’t want if you’re looking at a hamburger you don’t want a really thick piece of bread on top and then a little little tiny teeny teeny skinny burger in there right okay so melanne is here hi okay Rosa is saying the most difficult part in writing an essay is writing the introduction yeah.

I agree that the introduction is difficult it’s tricky it’s hard to know how to get started right how do you get started with the intro well let’s see if we can kind of walk you through it a little bit today okay so as I said the intro should be general sentences and then specific right so the general sentences those three or four or two or three sentences at the beginning of your introductory paragraph the first sentence should get the reader’s attention right you want to get the reader’s attention with an engaging opening sentence you want to start your essay with a with a strong sentence which some people call the hook right you want to get that attention it’s like your first impression right so get the readers interest then you might have to give the reader some more background information that they need to understand the issue okay.

If you’re talking about a controversial topic that many people disagree with you have to give maybe a little bit of information so that the reader understands what is the problem what is the disagreement okay and the whole point of these first opening sentences is to prepare the reader or kind of lead the reader think about that hourglass like this you are taking the reader to your thesis statement which is your your opinion okay so it’s kind of those general sentences are are creating a path for your reader to get to your main idea your your thesis statement yeah so tip number two now this is important write an engaging opening sentence so this is again this is what Rose is saying she has trouble with all students have trouble with that that first opening sentence yeah but don’t worry about it too much okay and let me let me give you a couple things to avoid and then I’ll give you an example of a fine opening sentence okay so avoid bland uninteresting facts.